For my first elevator pitch I only received positive feedback on my introduction, so I was sure to keep it for my second one. However, after watching other people’s pitches, I picked up on a couple ques. I also changed the wording a little, in an effort to make it flow better. I hope that my second one really helps convey my product even better than my first pitch!
I think you did a great job on the first elevator pitch and didn’t need to change a thing. However, your second pitch is still great also. I love the little humor that you applied to your pitch. I am also a candidate for this product and will invest in it because I am a water-head. At funerals, weddings, emotional movies, and just because. I will reap the benefit from this product. Good job!
ReplyDeleteHello again, Laura! I remember watching and commenting on your first draft of the elevator pitch, and even though back then I said it was great, I have to admit that somehow you made this one even better! I like how you seem more comfortable in it and your facial expressions and change in pitch really match what you’re trying to say.
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ReplyDeleteI thought your first pitch was great, but this one was easier to follow. You also look a bit more comfortable as well, which I missed out on. The pitch was also enjoyable to watch in addition to being easy to follow, which I think is what gives people their initial feeling after the pitch. You could definitely give this pitch to an audience of make another great one down the line!